I am a student in the Uru MÄnuka Cluster. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first drafts. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Hi Maria it's me Eunize from Wigram Primary School. I like the way you added good adjectives and some time order words. Maybe next time you could probably read your work again before you post it because there are I's that are not capital and a sentence that doesn't make sense. This reminds me of not reading my work again before posting it. Well done
hey bestie it's Zainab and I am from Ruru I like how you have put your emotions in your story.Next time I think you should add more words on your second paragraph but everything else is prefecto.I remember the time when I watched a movie I was so excited. From your Bestie Zainab.
Hey Maria it me Tutoe I liked the way that you used your paragraph and I liked the time orders Maybe next time you could use capital letters like Capital I By Tutoe Well done BTS
Hi Maria it's me Eunize from Wigram Primary School.
ReplyDeleteI like the way you added good adjectives and some time order words. Maybe next time you could probably read your work again before you post it because there are I's that are not capital and a sentence that doesn't make sense.
This reminds me of not reading my work again before posting it.
Well done
hey bestie it's Zainab and I am from Ruru
ReplyDeleteI like how you have put your emotions in your story.Next time I think you should add more words on your second paragraph but everything else is prefecto.I remember the time when I watched a movie I was so excited.
From your Bestie Zainab.
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ReplyDeleteHey Maria it me Tutoe I liked the way that you used your paragraph and I liked the time orders Maybe next time you could use capital letters like Capital I By Tutoe Well done BTS
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